There is little in the way of grammatical errors. Accountant is the only occupation that is capitalized. The information that labels and clarifies the different graph elements has an inconsistency of upper and lower case. Maybe they all need to be the same. Graph labels all lower case and occupations all uppercase possibly. The long black bar at the bottom is too dominant not to serve a purpose. Where you have the wage graph labeled, it reads, "numbers in thousands" but it might be more appropriate to label it something along the lines of "wages in thousands of dollars per year" because while we may assume it is a yearly salary it doesn't say that on the graph anywhere. While I really like the concept of using your icons to represent a bigger idea, it just dawned on me that there is a disconnect between the different jobs, and I think that the outside observer will wonder why these jobs are being compared. But at this point, I don't know what could be done. There is a disconnect between the graph, the map, and the title. Your visual language does not enhance the understanding of the content. I think that more explorations could be made in terms of data representation. The language of the map could possibly reference your icons. thank you ladies and gentlemen, good night.
I just noticed in the 11x17 print out that the top line that reads "bottom 10% of national wage" has a vector inconsistency. Also, on the note of those bars, it is odd that "bottom 10%" is on top, and "top 10%" is on bottom.
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There is little in the way of grammatical errors.
Accountant is the only occupation that is capitalized.
The information that labels and clarifies the different graph elements has an inconsistency of upper and lower case. Maybe they all need to be the same. Graph labels all lower case and occupations all uppercase possibly.
The long black bar at the bottom is too dominant not to serve a purpose.
Where you have the wage graph labeled, it reads, "numbers in thousands" but it might be more appropriate to label it something along the lines of "wages in thousands of dollars per year" because while we may assume it is a yearly salary it doesn't say that on the graph anywhere.
While I really like the concept of using your icons to represent a bigger idea, it just dawned on me that there is a disconnect between the different jobs, and I think that the outside observer will wonder why these jobs are being compared. But at this point, I don't know what could be done.
There is a disconnect between the graph, the map, and the title.
Your visual language does not enhance the understanding of the content. I think that more explorations could be made in terms of data representation. The language of the map could possibly reference your icons.
thank you ladies and gentlemen, good night.
I just noticed in the 11x17 print out that the top line that reads "bottom 10% of national wage" has a vector inconsistency. Also, on the note of those bars, it is odd that "bottom 10%" is on top, and "top 10%" is on bottom.
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